Working togetherCategory: Correctionarticle about abortion – please correct my text
RebeccaNew asked 5 years ago

I should write an article about a group of people who are completeley opposed to women having abortions.
 
The 44th March of Life
– An occasion to forge an opinion about abortion
 
The 44th March for Life was held on January 27, 2017. The March for life is a is a peaceful demonstration against the legalized abortion on demand.
Nellie Gray, who founded the first March of life on January 22, 1974 said once “I don’t understand slavery. I don’t understand the Holocaust. I don’t understand abortion.“
There were hundreds of thousands of pro-life supporters which have the same view. I asked a lot of women about their opinion.
My first question was “When does life begin?”. Paula S. said: “Life begins at conception, so unborn babies are human beings with a right to life.
I wanted to know what was so cruel about abortion and Liz A. answered: “The killing of an innocent human being is wrong, even if that human being has yet to be born. Do you know that fetuses feel pain during the abortion procedure?!
Another woman added in a loud voice: “Abortion is the killing of a human being, which defies the word of God.”
Susanne J. spook with me and explained that she was against abortion because she was pro-life and she supported women who were unwanted pregnant. The 44-year-old lady avered: “If women become pregnant, they should accept the responsibility that comes with producing a child.
Women should not be able to use abortion as a form of contraception.
Abortions cause psychological damage and may lead to future medical problems for the mother, like the risk of breast cancer.”

My next article informs you about the statements from the proponents of abortion.

casanne replied 5 years ago

spoke with me , (not spook) . unwanted pregnant ? hm… maybe better: unwillingly averd? maybe you mean : answered

Peter Robertson replied 5 years ago

“against legalized abortion on demand”
“pro-life supporters who have the same view”
“I asked a lot of women about their opinions.”
“Susanne J. spoke with me”
“who had unwanted pregnancies”
“My next article informs you about statements” (“will inform” if it has not yet been written)

1 Answers
elizadj answered 5 years ago

Please see below my comment 
It appears that you are missing a comma (or two) when writing a date- insert a comma after 1974.
The rest looks good. 
Eliza 
 
 

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